In the distance
When the moon sings
Of earthly ballads
In crimson tones
And across the hill
When a bird flies
Over the fears
Of mortal souls
I dance
To a whispery tone
With a deep caress
Of your ever lasting hold
I sway
To the rhythm divine
In an exquisite
Rendezvous
A meeting
Which I have already borne
In a day
I have lived before.
34 comments:
Beautiful, to say the least. That line about a bird flying over the fears of mortal souls is simply awesome.
very nice take on deja vu
Welcome to WI! Keep posting..
dancing comes full circle
Vik:
I'm glad you liked it.
Cricket's hearth:
Thank you!
Gautami Tripathi:
I hope to continue :)
You know I am amazed at the complexity of ur thinking process ... Too good
"I dance
To a whispery tone
With a deep caress
Of your ever lasting hold
I sway" - loved the way u said this
Alok
what an absolutely stellar debut post.. i do so hope you keep joining us!!!!
Beautiful.
The essence of you is restored here.Welcome back !
Very nice!
hey welcome to WI.. and I liked the idea of swaying to the rythmn divine.
Alok:
Thank you for appreciating what I wrote. My thinking process seems to be my biggest curse sometimes ;)
Paisley:
I'm glad you came by and liked what you got to read. Thank you!
Purple deepens:
As glad as I am to be here, I hope people continue to visit the page when I'm gone unannounced!
Constance:
Thank you!
Rambler:
Thank you for dropping by and acknowledging my poem. i hope to continue.
I, too have been very attached to the phrase ever since i first wrote it-despite the fact that i believe that I'm an atheist!
What a rendez-vous!!
With the singing moon; with a fearless bird;with a deep caress...
Carpe diem !!
Reading your poem reminds me of what
Ralph Waldo Emmerson said,
" if the sages ask thee why
this charm is wasted on the earth and sky.
Tell them dear, if eyes were made for seeing
then, beauty is its own excuse for being."
And want to thankyou specially for 'you know what'...!!
hugs.
j
exceedingly beautiful. you have robbed time of its essence in this one.
you have been writing some profound stuff of late.
awe inspiring....oh dear i just read it again... the enchantment of the seraphic girl !
I have lived before, too.
For a first timer, well done my dear. I loved these lines
"When the moon sings
Of earthly ballads
In crimson tones". Lovely and a good soon to be Passover to you and yours.
toujous, lanie-bd
I like this post and I think your poem very nicely sums up a day in the life of a moment of Deja vu
oh, this was simply magnificent....what beautiful imagery!
You ever heard of the music of the spheres?
u always amaze me!
Love it ^_^
-I
orgasmik:
Such praise!
Thank you J.
crimsonflaw:
Thank you so very much. I hope this pang of profoundness continues in my poetry!
Phoenix:
Yes, and I must say you have arisen from the ashes quite well!
Beloved dreamer:
I'm glad :)
Jadey, Rebecca, Impressionist:
Thank you!
Bobby:
As in the celestial bodies moving in a certain manner to produce music?
Hey!
Beautiful lines. Just blogrolled you.. hope that's fine with you.
- N
Yeah, that's what I meant. Yeah, this made me think of that. Your poems spark so much thought.
hey!
I am sherry and I have started a picture deication thread an my blog
impressionist has dedicated a picture and a message to you at
http://sherryrowl.blogspot.com/2008/03/say-it-with-pictures.html
he is waiting for your reply
take care
The soul of alec smart:
My pleasure!
Bobby:
I'm glad.
freesherry:
Thank you.
Wow!!!!!!!!!!!
Absolutely lovely words!!
wow!!
Snigdha, Stacey and Zephyr:
Thank you :)
The poem has a beautiful flow!
Where'd you go?
Lion chiller:
Thank you:)
Bobby:
Problems on the prowl.
meanwhile, wrote a short story on my other blog-
www.thejoypop.blogspot.com
beautifully written !
Aren't I glad I landed on ur blog!
Exquisite writing!
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