" To understand just one life, you have to swallow the world." Well i wont open the doors nor the windows to my world, but I'm ready to allow peep-holes!

Tuesday, August 14, 2007

A Prayer


In my ecstasy

let me live


upon my hard wood mattress

may my body rest


while i count the stars

that i may not see


i shall then

all those carpenters forgive.



on the seesaw of sorrow

let me play


while i slide down

the banister of life

as much of dismay


i shall forgive your blows

even if in so

i am sent to slay.



upon the trees of a desert land

where a thousand cactus can only grow


let me jump from tree to tree

as i dream of a green grass land

which seems to be from doom so free.



it is then

that i shall forgive this land of thee'

where a thousand errors are noted on me.

20 comments:

The Acid Tongue said...

Amen!
Some Perceptions do mstch!

PoisOn CoAtEd ELiXir said...

:)

WHAT'S IN A NAME ? said...

Killer of a poem! Liked this one a lot! More than anything I have read on your place. Hope you continue on this rich vein and dish out more of these....

PoisOn CoAtEd ELiXir said...

What's in a name:
thanks ya!
this is something i wrote 2-3 weeks back. i have two/three more. i wrote those while i was in the same mood.hope u like em too.

pRicky said...

errors noted on thee...
the thing is that freedom in a realistic or existential manner is quite an enticing concept and so is pain...
and help me out with this... whats a bannister of life?

Tugga said...

Rocking.......You touched my soul........

Tugga(http://travelogueworthtwocents.blogspot.com/)

Rajeev said...

Glorious is what i can say!

peace & love
Jeevy

Sophiagurl said...

what a beautiful prayer =)

oblique-skeptic said...

checking out ur blog after a really long time.

nice one. really strong.

imagine school children singing this out in the morning assembly..pure killer dat'd be :P

crimsonflaw said...

this is too beautiful to be left unanswered.

seraphic girl, it leaves me petrified... no false words here. just the lameness of a spiritual silence..

beautiful poem, beautiful...utterly..am speechless.

purple deepens.. said...

beautiful. :)

and among these lines of yours..
let me tremble and weep..
for heart's enriched with bliss,
never stops to reap.

ah..feels blessed.

Jeya Anand said...

i shall forgive your blows

even if in so

i am sent to slay.

that says it all!!!

Sach said...

all i wanna say is that it's as b'ful as Thee!

Dream catcher said...

one of ur most appealing one...

i m just moving with it...:)

i shall forgive your blows
even if in so
i am sent to slay.


but will it b justified..altruistic approach mademoiselle

PoisOn CoAtEd ELiXir said...

pricky:

a bannister of life, is your support, something which can be seen as one's helping hand,power and so on and so forth. but at the same time, the same thing "may" help you go the other way-slide down too.
so banister of life may be different things to diff people.

tugga:
thank you so much. ill visit your blog and add you asap.

Rajeev:
im glad you liked it :)

sophiagurl:
thank you :)

oblique-skeptic:
lol. yeah that would be a killer. but i hope they dont have to pray this way.

crimsonflaw:
thanks a lot :D

purple deepens:
thanks gal!

jeya anand:
glad!

sach:
:)

Dream catcher:
justified or not, thats just the way it is.

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janetleigh said...

What a fantastic read! I gasped at the closing words. Whew! Wow.

Alina Sharon said...

Quite frankly, I was touched. I browse many blogs of so-called poets and have yet to find something so unique, unstylized and flowing. I loved the image of the wooden matress and the carpenters. Excellent.

Shy Machete said...

And amen to that!

floots said...

thank you
i especially like "seesaws of sorrow" - for its alliterative quality and the truth of the idea